The broken-hearted girl.I'd like to thankeveryone who has faved or commented on this work, not to mention the amazing people behind DLD for featuring me.
Thank you so much. This monstrousity is something my newly discovered muse, Gabriel, wrote a while back and which I had ignored until now.
I've been debating either to hide this forever or to submit it. I mean, it sounds like a real person and a real problem, not at all made up.Gender of the Narrator's voice?This was written from a guy's pov, though now I'm worried it may not seem so. Whenever I read this I hear a male voice in my head......as a visual piece?How would you change the way the sentenes were displayed? Personally, I'm not content with it. Not a 100%, at least. Although I can't put my finger on how would I change it if I could.
Recently I've found a piece that strikes as true; life is to be lived while we can, in the here
. So... I left a critique, hopefully it has been of some help for the author.One Chance